So I'm working on a script for a furry visual novel and I'm looking for feedback on my first draft. The story is about a repressed college student who accidentally awakens a meso-american god of sexuality. It's very "I Dream of Genie," but with furries and sexual misadventure :3
My main concerns at this point are creating believable and likable characters, and balancing the story segments with the sexy stuff. I don't want to bury the explicit content behind pages of setup, but I still want the underlying place and characters to feel alive and engaging. I'm not especially interested in format notes - the layout here is for ease-of-use when I transcribe it into the game engine. Having said that if anything is unclear in the delivery of a line, definitely let me know.
Thank you for the feedback!
www.furaffinity.net: Tail-quila Visual Novel Script Ch1 Part1 by RedRabbit
My main concerns at this point are creating believable and likable characters, and balancing the story segments with the sexy stuff. I don't want to bury the explicit content behind pages of setup, but I still want the underlying place and characters to feel alive and engaging. I'm not especially interested in format notes - the layout here is for ease-of-use when I transcribe it into the game engine. Having said that if anything is unclear in the delivery of a line, definitely let me know.
Thank you for the feedback!
www.furaffinity.net: Tail-quila Visual Novel Script Ch1 Part1 by RedRabbit