Looking for feedback on my story

[Loot Rat]

Howdy yall!

I'm hoping to get some feedback on my story before the forums get nuked. So far I've managed to write 2 chapters and 11k words so there is something to read.
I'd appreciate it if people could read at least some of it.

The story is about the fennec fox named Colt going through his military service while reuniting with his childhood friend, while also getting some new acquaintances as well.
Overall, I'd say it's a light-hearted story with erotic moments sprinkled in.
All feedback is welcome but be gentle. >w<
This is my first time writing a longer story so keep that in mind. (I'm dum)
I will post the story to Fur Affinity in the future if yall think that it has any value at all. Else wise I just use it as writing practice.

The story is in the attachments as PDF

Here is art for some characters in the story:

Colt: In the attachment
Jane: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/44039634/
Bessie: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/42475762/

Hopefully at least someone reads it...

 

[reptile logic]

Your PDF is broken. "File corrupted"

 

[Loot Rat]

Your PDF is broken. "File corrupted"

Let me fix it real quick

 

[Loot Rat]

Should be good now

 

[reptile logic]

I did a quick edit on the PDF at my end. I'll send it back to you, but private messaging doesn't allow attachments.

Do I have your permission to drop the edited PDF here? I'm happy to remove it, just as soon as I know that you have it.

 

[Loot Rat]

Sure thing

 

[reptile logic]

Here ya go. . . *deleted*

 

[Loot Rat]

Alright got it

 

[Loot Rat]

Here ya go. . . *deleted*

Read the feedback and i'm making notes. Thanks

 

[reptile logic]

@Loot Rat , and anyone else, I just discovered that the PDF file you sent me is 3.7 times larger than the one which holds my 77k word novel! You have a bunch of something riding on that file. I don't know yet if any of that file is dangerous, but it is abnormally huge for what little reading information it contains.

In short, Your file is far too large, and may be carrying dangerous code!!!

 

[Loot Rat]

@Loot Rat , and anyone else, I just discovered that the PDF file you sent me is 3.7 times larger than the one which holds my 77k word novel! You have a bunch of something riding on that file. I don't know yet if any of that file is dangerous, but it is abnormally huge for what little reading information it contains.

In short, Your file is far too large, and may be carrying dangerous code!!!

That's odd. I downloaded it from google drive. I will look into this

 

[reptile logic]

It could be harmless; an attached image or two that does not come across on my screen would explain it.

 

[Vinfang]

I hope it's something harmless, cause I downloaded it to my computer...

 

[Loot Rat]

Could be that the comment from google drive got stuck on the pdf. Or maybe a image is attached to it. I did add one at one point but everything should be deleted. Well i can post just a text file i guess if the file size freaks people out.

*I added just pure text file now.

 

[Loot Rat]

I suppose there are 2 fonts in the pdf
As far as i understand the content streams is stuff like text, and 63 KB seems fine to me
The analysis does not tell what the other 9 kb are but does not seem like much
Dammit i'm not trying to scam people >w<

 

[reptile logic]

121kb feels right. I don't know enough to know why it happpened, and I have deleted the file from my computer, sorry for not knowing more. All I'm certain of is that the PDF that made it to my computer was over 3.7Mb. That's why I brought it up.