RE: Offering Redlines < Resurrected! 3/18/07
Sasuke Starseeker said:
Hi Blotch, could you tell me what do you think about the following sketches I posted some days ago? Can you give me some corrections, please? Thanks in advance! :wink:
Sketch 1
Sketch 2
Heya!
Some nice sketches you have here. :]
I figured for now I'd tackle the first one, since wings hasn't really come up on this thread before.
Overall, your character looks pretty good and solid, and your proportions are all in the right ratio in terms of arms/legs, etc--with the small exception of the character's left eye being noticeably smaller than the right. Beyond that, you've the basics of the figure down nicely. :]
The wings need a little work, though. Wings are built very similarly to arms (since well, they were once arms.) If you roll your shoulders back and bend your elbows, make a closed fist and stick out your pointer finger, you can mimic a birds wing (the pointer finger acts as the "flight finger" which is much longer on a bird's "hand.") All of a bird's feathers attach to the skin on this extended "flight finger," or along the "forearm" (ok, before someone corrects me, it's just a simplified way to describe it, don't jump on me because boids dernt have no fingars. >;] )
A birds feathers layer on top of each other, connecting all along that flight finger, or the arm bone. The longest feathers are called pinions (primaries and secondaries) and the others are all converts (primary converts, secondary, auxiliary, tertials, blah blah blah, who wants to get technical.) The pinions are the large, "bladed" feathers, and the others are more rounded and provide the "seal" over the wing to keep lift. The ends of a feather on the wing help define the anatomy and add the touch of realism.
Also, bird wings do not bend so sharply at the top--its a rounded bend. Bat wings are only ones that can fold completely around their body, and have that really sharp bend.
Another thing to keep in mind when designing a character with wings--ask yourself what kind of bird wing. For example: really elegant wings: Owls or Herons, large encompassing wings: Vultures, sharp wings: sea birds, etc etc.
If you can pull off a natural looking wing with realistic feathers, you win! Win what? Who knows. But at least your sketches will look awesome! ;]
Ahem, anyway, wing rant aside, you're drawing looks pretty good and constant. If you'd like, I'd be happy to go back over it more thoroughly and offer some suggestions on the wrinkles and overall anatomy of the figure.
I'd like to see more wings from you, if you have the chance. :]
Cheers,
-Blotch