I am the Demolition Man
Earlier this year, I got inspired and wanted to practice some writing, and ended up writing a 3 page short story thing, more like an excerpt of a scene from something larger. I started to edit that first draft for the next few days, but it started to feel like I wasn't really making any progress. Felt like I was replacing clunky sentences with other clunky sentences, having trouble just coming up with any good sentences. Thought I'd post it anyways just for some advice and opinions.
Pickaxe The man sat on the floor of an abandoned kitchen, back up against a row of shelves, canteen next to him, hand on his chest, trying to catch his breath as if he had run across the entire desert. His brain pulsated from a searing headache, feeling like it was pushing against the inside of...